New Script - In Progress

Writing the Script

Hey David, I broke down the scenes a bit more, i think it makes more sense. Couple of things may not be quite right. I thought he needed a reason for him to smack into the rock so i added the eagle shadow. Let me know if you want me to change anything, i couldnt make out also how the marmot steals the food, so i hope i got that right??

Snatched

Directed

By

David Legge

Script

Scene One

Ext – Deserted Mongolian landscape – Dawn/Morning

Camera pans down from a early morning sky to show a vast sandy desert landscape with large snowed mountains, there is a small wooden hut with a smouldering fire outside in the distance.

A Mongolian man (mongol) has prepared his food placing his plate on a wooden log.

The Man looks really hungry and happy that he is about to eat his food. Meanwhile a Marmot jumps out of a bush and towards the Mongolian man.

The Marmot jumps on the back of the Mongolian mans head and runs away with the food.

The Mongolian Man is very upset and Angry.

Scene Two

EXT- Mongolian Landscape

The Mongolian man chases the Marmot across a vast distance over a hill. We can see here how far away the Marmot is from the Mongolian Man as he pants behind.

The Marmot Dodges round a giant rock.

An eagles shadow is cast on the ground in front of the Mongolian Man, causing the Mongolian to look up and therefore doesn’t see the rock he then smacks into.

The Mongolian is in a lot of pain and rolls around on the floor.

Scene Three

Ext – Deserted Mongolian landscape – Morning

The Mongolian man chases the marmot further.

The Marmot jumps over a broken down Cart without any problems.

The Mongolian man crashes into the Cart sending debris flying.

The Mongolian man Appears from the dust and debris, attached to two of the Cart’s wheels where he is struggling to stay on them.

The Mongolian flies past getting closer and closer to the Marmot.

Scene Four

Ext –Forest - Morning

They enter into a forest full of trees, its quite dark with angel rays shooting through.

The Mongolian makes a jump for the marmot and the wheels fly off.

The Mongolian is inches from the marmot when an Eagle swoops in and picks up the Marmot.

The Man is by himself, looking up at the eagle taking his food away.

The Mongol looks to the floor and sees a big leaf that looks like a feather.

Black screen

Scene Five

Ext –Outside of Forest - Morning

The Mongolian Man is set and ready to jump off the cliff with leaves and Twigs attached to each of his arms to look like Wings.

Titles

Tara KImberley Dulake

The Scrpt is up, Please let me know what to change, i couldnt work out how the marmot got his food. I added the birds shadow to give a reason as to why the mongolian smacks into the rock, unless he is trying to be cocky where ill change it to that. Please let me know. Thanks. xx

about an hour ago · · Comment ·

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    David Christopher Legge Pretty much there, Just a few things to change

    about an hour ago ·
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    David Christopher Legge Ok i just wrote it all then lost it lol pressed the wrong button. Ok just keep it set in the mongolian plains as desert may confuse the audience, they may not associate mongolia with desert. i got rid of the marmot stepping towards the man as we just dont have time, he shouldn't jump on his head as its a very fast inrto. He smashes in to the rock , i think thats fine as he is frantic desperate and more preocupied with the food while the marmot jumps i think by putting the eagle in it will just get to confusing as these scenes are so quick, the audience wont have time to work things out. the shadow could be put in a subtle way in another scene. He doenst have to roll aound the floor as that will break the chase it has to be continuos. The last bit is prety perfect just change to tree branch lol with leaves sorry to be so anal just got a get it right. and then the final scene is of him like a bird .